With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised to access to the internet in order to meet and chat with their friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with the problem?

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social
media
plays a vital role among youngsters and
this
leads to
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children
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childrens
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children
children's
easily connecting with friends as well can
also
conveniently watch videos online whereas
with
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no proper
supervisions
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on
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children
childrens
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can lead to
potentail
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potential
potentially
hazardous issues. In the following
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, I will discuss
about
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the possible reasons and relative
solutation
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solution
to fix
this problems
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.
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boom of
internet
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the internet
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and
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accessibility
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the accesability
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of it by just using your smartphone
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lead
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us to
more
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see the world in a different sense. It can be
interms
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in terms
of gaining
knowelege
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knowledge
, passing you time streaming online, connecting with your friends or processing payments online all these can be done in just one touch but the downside of these is there
is
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no age restrictions who can use internet especially social
media
platforms
such
as Instagram, Facebook or
twitter
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Twitter
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. It is common
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sightseeing
sighting
to see kids using all these
platforms
for multiple reasons and always keeping a track
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them is a priority. In recent years, according to
Times
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the Times
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of India, especially during
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a pandemic
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pandemic
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when parents and other house members
where
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forced to give their
childrens
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children
a
smart phone
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smartphone
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where they can pass their time and stay inside the home has led to some lenience to the teens and
this
has led to disasters
sutations
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situations
for the family
such
as making
a big online transactions
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big online transactions
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or providing
creditials
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credentials
to online and
also
connecting with toxic strangers which later had resulted in
a
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bad behavioural patterns.
Nevertheless
, all these situations can be
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over
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come
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buy
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by
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emphasising
on
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the negative effect that can happen to them and
also
restricting the usage of social
media
platforms
and
also
shadowing their each and every
usage
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on
day
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to day life. To conclude, social
media
platforms
will gain lots of teenagers in upcoming times but as parents and other household
memebers
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members
should constantly keep in check with the
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child's
childs
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doings and if they
have
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lead to
a dangerous conditions
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dangerous conditions
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just making them understand about its effects can lead them to behave and use these
platforms
in a proper manner.
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