More and more people are working from home rather than at the workforce. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, we are facing the covid-19 pandemic in the world. Because of the coronavirus pandemic every country
also
implementing a strict lockdown.
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it caused the shutdown of all the companies, schools, institutions and research centres. Right now many companies and research institutions allow
people
to
work
from
home
where some communities happily accept
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job
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from
home
and
other’s
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not. I think some
people
like that because they will have time for family.
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they can
work
on
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different part-time jobs with other
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and earn more money.
On the other
hand
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people
who
doesn’t
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prefer
work
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from
home
might be facing problems like mental and family issues. At the moment many
people
pursue additional courses
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online.
For
example
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they are learning
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about others
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others
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activities and teaching the students
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online
class
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. It has allowed
people
to
work
at any time or watch television and chill with friends.
As a result
, a person feels comfortable and becomes more concentrated on his responsibilities. In conclusion,
however
arguments above in support of each opinion, we can see there are many advantages and disadvantages of being employed from
home
and I want to say that it must be decided by everybody which way of employment to choose.
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