Some people today believe that the world increases in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society -Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Nowadays the global population counts around 7 billion people, and it seems it will increase in the future. About
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different points of view have emerged.
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consider it as the natural result of an
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the quality of life, others are more concerned about the
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global overpopulation. Historically the population growth has always been quite slow until important new discoveries were made, allowing better life conditions, making more food available and improving the health conditions of the population. In
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the higher average lifetime is related to an increasing number of people. For
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excessive growth can lead to many problems in the future caused by the limited resources of the Earth. Apart from that, most developed countries have lower fertility rates and
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can suggest a certain grade of correlation between fertility and poverty. Nowadays
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was the case in most Asian countries. The situation has changed due to three main causes.
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wider access to education allowed women to take care of their working careers and decreased the average age of
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better health care decreased the
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mortality rate and
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the availability of contraception led to
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better family planning. For
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fair investments.
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a future global crisis. The main problem nowadays is not the excessive number of individuals in the world but the non-homogeneous distribution of resources among them.
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