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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Write at least 250 words

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Presently the World over, it is not surprising to find most
businesses
 and
industries
 flooded in Cities
unlike
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 the regional
areas
. It is no wonder most Governments are encouraging
setting
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 up of
industries
 and
businesses
into
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in
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 the regional
areas
. In
this
 thesis, I will discuss whether
advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages of
industries
 and
businesses
 being in regional
areas
 than the Cities. The main advantage of shifting
industries
 and
businesses
 into regional
areas
 from the Municipalities is to allow for
balanced
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 distribution of national wealth.
For instance
, if a certain known town has ten viable
businesses
, it would be a prudent thing to have five of
such
 located in one region and the other half shifted onto the other side. The effect of
this
 equilibrium will be that; the population of the two locations will almost be identical, as many will be trekking
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directions
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 searching for job opportunities. On one hand, the resultant effect of
this
 noble act shall be equal advancement in both localities.
On the other hand
, failure to implement
this
 economic stability shall culminate into having two
areas
 with unequal opportunities. Another advantage of having equal business/industrial privileges in different
areas
 is the ability to improve people's way of life almost synchronously. If the majority of the locals are employed, they will be getting a salary which will significantly improve their family status financially. A reversal of
such
 economic fortunes (disadvantage) results in devastating consequences opposite to the one earlier alluded to. Without a doubt, I feel and think that
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 for most sovereign states' quest to inspire
industries
 and
businesses
 into the regional
areas
 from the traditional cities. In
this
 manuscript, I discussed that
advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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for
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 an attempt by many territories to relocate
industries
/
businesses
 from towns into regional
areas
. Wholeheartedly, I am in support of the move for
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 enormous benefits to society and
Country
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the Country
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 in general.
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