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•Some people think that teachers’ duties are not confined in academic subjects only, but social values, too, should be part of tier duties.

many arguments about whether schoolteacher's duties are just limited in the learning process or they have to contribute
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 helping
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about
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 their social life
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 are on the stage. As far as I am concerned,
tutors
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 shouldn't confine their
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 just
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 teaching academic subjects only, as they could play
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 significant
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 in improving their social aspects.
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, no one would argue that, nowadays,
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 spend much of their
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 with
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teacher
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. Unlike
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 19th century,
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 now spend much of their childhood and adolescence life in
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, and these periods are
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time
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 to learn
valubale
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valuable
 social manners.
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,
tutors
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 should allocate a significant amount of their
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 in order to teach juveniles
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social values.
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,
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, especially junior
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, feel that teachers are their
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role-models
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.
Students
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 usually tend to obey
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their tutor's
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advice
advices
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,
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 and behave the way their teachers act
infront
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in front
 of them.
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, a study has been conducted about the effect of schoolteachers on the moral values of children, and it shows that children who regularly get advice from their
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become more considerate and respectful than other
students
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.
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, many people support the view that
school
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schools
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 are not just
centre
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 of learning but it is
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 a place to develop valuable social skills. To show an example, many people
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 that they
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first
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 made their friendship at
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schools
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, and they made
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first
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 social experience at school.
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,
tutors
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 should consider their
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 as an intermediate
role
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 between different
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 and they should be the pioneer of
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healthy social interactions for the new generations at
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. To sum up, in my opinion, schoolteachers should try to involve in helping Young
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 with developed social values, that's because, in
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 days and age,
students
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 spend plenty of
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 at school, they consider their teachers as their
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role-models
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role models
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 and children's
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first
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 experience with social interactions are in their
schools
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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