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Some people believe that visitors to other country should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

It is considered by some that the tourists to other countries have to follow local customs and behaviours, while there are others who think that the
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country
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 needs to welcome cultural differences. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and express my opinion. On the one hand, many
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 think visitors to foreign countries must obey the local costumes and behaviour.
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 is because it is the local culture that attracts many visitors from various parts of the world. The
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country
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 just needs to give a true picture of itself.
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,
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 who think the
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country
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 should welcome cultural differences.
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, some
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 have experience of being not used to foreign cuisine, and some
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 may have language barriers on their trips.
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, these
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 have good reason to believe that the
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country
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 ought to welcome cultural differences. In my opinion, it is mutually beneficial that visitors have to respect and follow local traditions and cultures and the
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 nation
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 should welcome
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 from various cultures.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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