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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching student to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teacher should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 spent by a person in various types of media from 1990 to 2005. Overall, it appears that an individual spends the maximum hour of their time on television followed by the internet, radio & printed material stand below. In the early 1990s, television played a big role in every household as a source of information and entertainment, which is one reason why the
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 the end on the period. Meanwhile, the usage of radio and print medium was not on the higher side. Even though radio was a common device used in every household and because of a very limited
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral values
  • ethics
  • character development
  • academic knowledge
  • teaching methodologies
  • curriculum
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual growth
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • life skills
  • decision-making
  • behavioral issues
  • conflict resolution
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