The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.
The pie charts
illistruates
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illustrates
illustrate
the proportion of
water
useages
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usages
usage
in six areas around the world for various kinds of reasons.
Overall
, we can say that
agricultural
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agriculture
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is the main reason
of
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for
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water
useage
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usage
in four places
such
as South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
while
wate
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water
is mostly used for industrial in North
America
and Europe. The same pattern applies to domestic
use
which is the least reason to spend
water
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except
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in South
America
where domestic is the
second
most common reason.
Firstly
, the
water
consume
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rate of
agricultural
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agriculture
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is the most common purpose in Africa, Central
Asia
, Sout East
Asia
and South
America
with 84%, 88%, 81% and 71% of the total consumption respectively. But, the percentages of
industrail
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industrial
use
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fluctuated around 5% to 12% in those countries and the same thing happens to domestic
use
between 7% and 9% despite the fact that 19% for
Sout
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South
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America
.
However
, the most
industralized
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industrialized
industrialised
places
such
as North
America
and Europe
use
most of their
water
for industries which
equal
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to 48% and 53% each other. The agricultural
use
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uses
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are
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39% and 32% and 13% and 15% for domestic
use
respectively.
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