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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some declare that it would be favourable if the vast majority of employees worked from
home
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insteade
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instead
 of going to a workplace daily. It is more flexible in time plus
spending
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 less effort working from
home
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.
This
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advantaages
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advantages
 that outweigh the disadvantages.
First
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 of all, working from
home
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 has many benefits, it is
safing
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saving
 for time ,
having
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has
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 more comfort zone areas and
helping
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helps
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 maintain
a
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better health.
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, when a
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person
 knows that he/she does not need to travel a far distance and can work at his/her convenience creating a desire to do the
jobb
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job
 in
perfect
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a perfect
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 manner.
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, being able to work from
individual's
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an individual's
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 place.
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,
reduce
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 the usage of fuel and that safe money. Another good of working from
home
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 is keeping more concentration and
safing
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saving
 the environment from using
transportaion
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transportation
 or
car
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cars
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 that consume fuel that can impact the
climat
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climate
.
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, it is less risky to have any disease like Covid-19 or any common cold. To sum up, working from
home
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 is one of the best
way
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 that its benefit
outweigh
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outweighs
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 its disadvantages, its
saving
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saves
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 time and energy plus money.
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