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As most people spend a major prt of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of indicidual wllbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realisticnis the expectations of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Nowadays, many adults have
full time
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 jobs and the proportion of
thier
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their
 lives spent in the workplace is very high.
Therefore
, feelings about one's
job
 reflect how
and
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individual
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the individual
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 feels about his or her life as a whole, and because of
this
,
job
satisfaction
 is very important indeed for well being of that person. In the following, several elements associated with
job
 gratification will be elaborated
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To begin
 with,
work
 delight is
multifunctional
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a multifunctional
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 or multifactor phenomenon.
Firstly
, a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable
work
, so positive feedback from superiors is very important in
this
 regard.
Secondly
, the most obvious one is salary, which guarantees our standards of material life and it is the direct indicator of our own value.
In other words
, salary is the foundation of
job
satisfaction
 for
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.
Thirdly
, another important factor is the working environment and the company culture. A positive company environment and joyful company culture may help individuals
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adapt
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adopt
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 themselves to
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 in the shortest time and generate a sense of belonging. To add on,
ofcourse
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of course
 not everyone enjoys their
work
. Hard
economics
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 realities
means
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 that many folks have little choice
of
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 the kind of
job
 they can get. In some cases, an employee is working in a
job
 that neither suits their skills nor their personality.
Furthermore
, some jobs are repetitive and Boring. And working culture may be poor,
that
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 leads to insecurity rather than
job
satisfaction
.
However
 as per my conclusion, even though it is unlikely that all the workers will feel happy in their
work
, I think it is not unrealistic to promote
job
satisfaction
 in any
job
. If the positive factors identified above are implemented, any
job
 can be satisfactory.
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