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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
One
 of the conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that a low salary is more disadvantageous. There is a widespread worry that
this
 will lead to a myriad of concerns in
one
’s life.
However
, I do not entirely accept
this
 and I will explain why in
this
 essay. There are a number of arguments in
favor
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 of my stance. The most preponderant
one
 is that job satisfaction gives people a sense of
fulfillment
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 and there are numerous other benefits in various fields. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only does
one
 benefit more when it comes to being effective, but they can enhance productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease, efficacy, and convenience. Needless to say, all these merits stand
one
 in good stead, as far as augmenting the chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned. Another pivotal factor in the aforementioned proposition is that it is only likely to help
one
 thrive and excel in varied areas.
Besides
, when only
one
 follows
such
 a system, can they broaden their horizons,
thus
 learning
such
 attributes as dedication and perseverance.
Hence
, it is apparent why many are in
favor
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 of job satisfaction. In the views of the arguments outlined above,
one
 can conclude that the benefits of job satisfaction are indeed too great to ignore.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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