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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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It is argued that huge pay is more dominant than job contentment.I completely disagree with
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 contentment is more important than high wages.
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, Job satisfaction gives people more happiness than money.Even if someone is having high payroll and is suffering from anxiety, stress and nervousness they are not satisfied with their profession.
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 because of their wages,but because they are interested in teaching.
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 is the prime reason for leading a happy
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,if people are satisfied with their
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,it helps in their career growth. As they are interested
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 they tend to develop new skills and will be productive in their
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, Dale Phillip
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 job to become a travel blogger.After many ups and downs in his career throughout the years now he is one of the most successful travel bloggers in the world.
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 for being successful in
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. In conclusion,
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 money is important in
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life
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but
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 contentment helps people to live a relaxed
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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