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Traffic congestion is becoming problomatic inmajor cities what solutions can be suggest to help to solve the problem

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It has been observed that a large
number of
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traffic congestion in many big cities is becoming
the
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argueable
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arguable
problems
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problem
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 in many big cities. In
this
 essay, I intend to examine what are the causes and impact of the development before
the
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 reasonable conclusion can be drawn.
To begin
 with, using
of
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private
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the private
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car
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cars
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 on the road are the main
causes
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cause
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 of
this
 issue. Having said that, almost every people
are used
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 their own car for travelling to
the
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work
especially
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 in
a
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rush
hours
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 because they think that it is convenient and save their
times
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. In fact, due to the increasing
number of
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population, the number of demanding vehicles is needed for visiting from one place to another.
As a result
, it becomes
the
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 serious problem in
crowded
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a crowded
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city
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cities
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.
However
, to solve
this
 problem people should use public transportation. To elaborate
further
, the government provides transportation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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