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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Recognising good or bad is one of the key
feature
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 that
children
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 need to
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when
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 they are young. In my opinion, it is acceptable to instruct
children
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 by discipline. Punishment and regulations force themselves to train for a better
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 in the future.
Children
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 have no definitions
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 good or bad
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the
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 early age,
parents
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 need to be their
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 and teach them what are the differences. How adults respond to
children
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 has long-term consequences on their thoughts, acts and even how they interact with others. Limits and regulations must be used in the process to help
children
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 recognise that they have to pay a price if they do something wrong. There are numerous ways to teach
children
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 about
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 distinction. A common
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 is to set a timeout for their gadgets. Limiting the time
children
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 use electric devices may help them to interact more with the
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 world.
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, their
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with
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 others will get better. Another
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 to assist
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distinguish
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 good or bad is to take away something.
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, if they use their money in an inaccurate
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, their
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 should give them less money or take away their money.
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, adults have to explain to their
kid
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 why they are being punished.
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,
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 should spend more time with their
children
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 in order to educate and correct
children
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 immediately when they do wrong things. To sum up, it is possible to use punishment to teach
children
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 what is right and wrong but adults need to point out their mistakes in order to avoid misunderstanding.
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 that,
parents
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 should spend more time with their kids to make sure they are growing in the right
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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