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Paying all workers, the same in a company promotes harmony and respect among colleagues. Do you agree and disagree?

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In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue that rewarding all
employees
 the same in a firm encourages harmony and respect among staff members. A lion's share of society favours it,
however
 the rest
averse
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 to it. The following paragraphs would elucidate my personal perspective. I do not see eye to eye with a central idea for multifarious reasons.
First
 and foremost, it is unfair to
workers
 who are well-educated and well-experienced.
Secondly
, no one will put extra effort to make the product better as they do not get extra pay for it.
Thus
, it will decline the quality of
company
 products. Adding
further
 a couple of more things, majority of senior staff members leave the
company
 as they have more experience, but the
company
 pays same wages to everyone. To substantiate it, I would like to quote an epitome of a manager who has more responsibilities as compared to other
workers
 in the
company
. Paying the same to them will create dissatisfaction among them.
Last
 but not least, it demotivates the
workers
 to get done work on time. As they do not have healthier competition between co-
workers
 as well as no one put extra effort to make products better. Which can be harmful to the
company
’s reputation. (Reputation of the
company
) On the logger's head, some critics go against the above-stated idea. Through the same wages, there will not be conflict among
workers
thus
 they would work hard every day to accomplish the target of the
company
.
Moreover
, it encourages to
employees
 have better teamwork in the office which will boost the economy of the
company
. All the above-discussed assertions lead to the conclusion that the organizations should pay salaries according to their job position since it motivates
employees
 to perform well in all tasks at the office. All
employees
 will be satisfied if they will get their deserved salary for the work they do in their profession.
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