Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
tech-savvy modern world, children
are addicted to video games
rather than outdoor exercises or playing sports. Some parents claim that physical activities
should be made mandatory for children
instead
of video games
. Although
some people do not agree with this
, I completely support their viewpoint as physical activities
improve health and cognitive development.
To commence with, one cannot deny that one of the ways to maintian
fitness is by being active in outdoor Correct your spelling
maintain
activities
which will help children
to develop physique and stay healthy. To explain further
, children
who go to the gym everyday
will have a good physique as they spend some Replace the word
every day
time
everyday
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every day
to build
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building
musle
. Correct your spelling
muscle
For instance
, children
who participate in cardiovascular execises
and weight Correct your spelling
exercises
lifiting
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lifting
are
tend to have Unnecessary verb
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six-pack
six pack
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six-pack
body
. Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
In addition
to gym
, youth who regularly play Add an article
the gym
a gym
the
intensive outdoor sports like soccer and cricket, Correct article usage
apply
they
are more fit as they run Correct pronoun usage
apply
everday
. Correct your spelling
everyday
As a result
, they lead health
life as Replace the word
healthy
such
activities
diminish stress and obesity . Thus
, playing sports and exercising regulary
leads to Correct your spelling
regularly
healthy
life and build a great body physique.
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a healthy
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to
the Change preposition
apply
above mentioned
physical fitness, Add a hyphen
above-mentioned
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in outdoor events Correct your spelling
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at in
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early age like yoga, Correct your spelling
an
zumba
dance, and Change the capitalization
Zumba
gymnatics
are improve brain functioning. Correct your spelling
gymnastics
First
and foremost, In children
who often participate in meditation develops
a greater memory and Correct subject-verb agreement
develop
respone
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response
time
, this
is because meditation helps youth to organise their thoughts in brain
in Add an article
the brain
a
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an
appropiate
way which Correct your spelling
appropriate
help
them to respond to Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
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real-time
real
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real-time
time
situatios
faster than others. Correct your spelling
situations
situation
Besides
response time
, exercises help them to refresh from their busy academic schedule which reduces depression,
and contributes to Remove the comma
apply
achieve
calm and peaceful life that improves Change the verb form
achieving
apptitude
skills.
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aptitude
Finally
, to recapitulate, in this
technology world childeren
are inclined toward playing video Correct your spelling
children
games
and no
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have no
intrest
in playing outdoor Correct your spelling
interest
games
. In my opinion, I propose more physical activities
are required for youth to imporve
their physical and mental health for the aforementioned reasons.Correct your spelling
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