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Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. In your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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The homeschooling issue is one of the most argued arguments in these
last
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 years. There are
people
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 who are convinced that
school
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 should be compulsory for all
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,
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, there are others who believe that parents should decide to choose to educate their
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 from
home
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 essay will discuss both points of
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 and it will explain why I firmly believe that
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 have to attend
school
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. On the one hand,
people
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 who prefer to educate their
children
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 at
home
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 have different advantages linked with the avoidance of money and
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 waste. To exemplify, many times parents have to take their
children
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 to
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 and
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 they have to retake them. Actually,
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 is a waste of
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 from an economical point of
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, there are different disadvantages linked with the incomes of the fuel or the ticket's cost for public means of transport.
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, studying from
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 could help families to spend less money on transport and
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, it allows them to earn
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 avoiding commuting
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.
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, many families believe that
school
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 should be compulsory. I agree with
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. Despite the advantages mentioned above, if
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 go to
school
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, they will be able to socialise better with other
people
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.
Children
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 who study at
home
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 will have a lack of social interaction because during the day they will not have other
people
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 to bond with.
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, going to
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 will lead
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 to have
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 huge benefit that it the chance to interact with others. I strongly believe that
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 advantage is stronger than the other that regards saving money and
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. Actually, during the COVID-19 pandemic, we have seen that loneliness leads
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 to have health problems.
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, studying at
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 is more helpful for the development of individual skills among
children
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. To sum up, concerning homeschooling, there are two different points of
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. There are
people
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 who prefer to educate
children
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 at
home
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 rather than take them to
school
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. I firmly believe that going to
school
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 brings more benefits to
children
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, especially the chance to socialize with others.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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