Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects- Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, with the development of education more and more
people
are willing to care
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subject allocation in school. There is an argument that some
people
believe
history
is more important than STEM (
Science
,
Technology
,
Economy
and Mathematics) subjects. In my view,
history
should be equally important as
Science
and
Technology
. On the one hand, those
people
who support that
history
is more vital than other subjects may believe that
students
should not forget
the
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history
and traditional culture. Indeed,
history
is the basic cultural root of countries.
For instance
, the young generations who are interested in historical events and books might value their lives as they can learn how humans developed for thousands of years and how difficult they can live in a peaceful world.
On the other hand
,
Technology
and
Science
are fundamentally important fileds as
it
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promote the rapid development of urban society and
economy
. Due to the jump in
economy
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, a large number of children have opportunities to attend universities and gain well education because of the free admission fee for
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school.
Besides
, transportation costs can be greatly reduced. If more
students
are involved in
technology
and
science
, the
economy
will gain
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jump. In conclusion, My view is that
school
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should place equal stress on
history
and STEM.
Although
technology
and
science
play a vital role in
the
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society,
history
also
allows
students
to learn how to be valuable
people
and contribute to society. Schools should not take priority to
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on
history
or STEM subjects, and they should give
students
more choices to engage in different fields.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical context
  • cultural heritage
  • societal development
  • scientific advancements
  • technological innovations
  • economic growth
  • global challenges
  • educational curriculum
  • interdisciplinary approach
  • innovation-driven economy
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