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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and looking after their six years old child. write a letter to the parents, in your letter explain why you would like the job give details for why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you with regard to your
advvertisment
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advertisement
 in the
the
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local newspaper, I would like to apply for
this
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 job.
Firslty
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Firstly
First
, let me introduce myself to you, I am Jean 30 years old,
I
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have seven years of experience in domestic helping and
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caregiving
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care giving
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caregiving
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 jobs.
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, I have worked as a home
maid
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 with an Australian family in Sydney and the have a child
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the same age
of
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 yours before, with all my skills for caring and dealing with children, and how to raise them and provide
a special services
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, I can say that I am qualified for
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 vacancy.
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, I take online
cources
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courses
 in my free time which help me to improve my skills and to be aware
about
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 the modern methods of
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caregiving
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care giving
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caregiving
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 and domestic
helpers
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helper
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taskes
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tasks
tasked
. I
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also
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 involved
to
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 the social debate group which
allowes
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allows
allowed
 me to share
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 experience with other members of the same field of mine. I will send my resume to the mentioned address, I am looking forward to
work
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 with you Best Regards Jean Allan

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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