You are organising a trip to Paris, France for a group of students from England. Write to the manager of the Youth Hostel Association in Paris. In your letter, explain when you want to visit Paris how long you will stay how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am an organiser of a trip, writing

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letter to get your assistance in regards hostel facility for foreign students visiting

paris

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Paris

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from England. We are planning to visit Paris

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this

fall season to explore

beautiful

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the beautiful

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sights

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paris

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Paris

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. We will

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departure

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departure

from England on August 12,2022

Mornining

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9:00 AM IST and arrive on the same day Evening

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:00 PM. Our trip is for 5 nights and 4 days, I guess it should be sufficient to cover all sights and landscapes within 50kms of radius. Including myself we are team of 11 individuals. I am looking for 5 double bed rooms for 10 students, they divide 2 people per room.

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, one individual room for myself.

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, we will need morning breakfast. Please let me know the availibility of rooms as soon as possible! With regards, Rana

Submitted by rana on Thu Jun 16 2022

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8 paragraphs

141 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You are organising a trip to Paris, France for a group of students from England. Write to the manager of the Youth Hostel Association in Paris. In your letter, explain when you want to visit Paris how long you will stay how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries.

Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/her own healthy lifestyle. Others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people think the money they earn should be enjoyed by spending it now,while others thinks that their earnings should be saved for future.discuss both views and give your opinion.

What is your preference when you are going to by a new electronic device: friend recommendation or read magazines, newspaper or an article? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?