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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace.with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate.Technology is increasinly responsible for unemployment. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Nowadays, with the progress of technology, we witness some
people
 have to give up their occupation and someone else changes their
work
, I will disagree with
this
 topic,
this
 essay will check the positive and negative aspects of
this
 matter and I express my idea very clear in continue. On the one hand, according to
this
 happen, there are many
people
 that become unemployed,
furthermore
, recently we can see in many factories machinery wants to do different
work
 rather than human,
for example
, in my country, there are many companies that they carry out their
work
 with a wide range of facilities and we can not see
such
 persons and all of their products are the forms of fully automatic,
however
, in the past, all of industries
work
 have worked by hand and we could see a number of the hard worker in different companies.
In contrast
, the technology had many advantages for many individuals around the world as well as can create many goods opportunity for
people
 and we can not condone them,
for instance
, nowadays, we can see various software that can occupy a lot of persons or the field of social media we can find many
people
 that they
work
 in the position of marketing,
in addition
, we can
work
 today with another country the form of remote and
this
 is lead to we earn much money than before and anyone can handle their job very easily than before and
this
 will improve our life. In conclusion, in my opinion, I firmly disagree with
this
 matter
also
 I think so nowadays, we skills can determine our job and if we have good skill and unique skill surely we can obtain our interesting job
also
 the technology wants to help up for having good condition compared to before.
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