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The internet has transformed lives and economies bit it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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it is obvious that
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 is part of our daily routine.
People
 do not take action before googling things or reading reviews. At
this
 point, some
people
 believe that everybody will think and behave in the same way. I do not agree with their idea. I
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 of
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 of all, it
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 mean that if we googling things, we may not end up with the same web page, reviews or videos. There is a variety of
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 or
information
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internet
. The way how we search things on the
internet
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 each other so we would not come to
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 conclusion. As an example, if we want to buy something online, we may compare the prices and qualities of that
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 from different pages and all the pages will give us some ideas.
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 the end, it would be our own
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decision
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 way, when we googling
information
, we can reach the sources like
wikipedia
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 or youtube. We may like to watch it as a video clip or we can read it, as well. It would depend on how we prefer to get that
information
. In the base, it would be the same
information
 as long as it is correct.
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, what we learn or how we put
this
information
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, trusted pages will gain more reputation
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People
 would use them more and their sources will become more reliable. In
this
 case,
people
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internet
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However
,
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 is an endless ocean and
people
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opinion
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 and
also
, their own special ways to come to conclusion. I believe that as long as there
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 million of souces out there on the
internet
, it would not be fair calling
people
 as same.
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