since the 18th century technology advances have replaced people in the workplace with todays technology. this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. Do what extant do you agree or disagree.

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Technological Innovations are playing
significant
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role in a country like
india
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since
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of
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century.
However
, it is somewhere contributing
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enhancement
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of unemployment .
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has become a debatable issue how with several explanations by scholars which will be discussed
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Initially
, these advancements are providing
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increase in national income,
moreover
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extent , as it has been clearly elaborated by a prominent economist namely A smith in his book regarding modernisation .
Although
it is somewhere affecting the illiterate individuals or labour force, who do not have any other option rather than working in huge manufacturing industries.
Moreover
, they
also
force dislocation of them from reputed
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-backward industries , in which they have to suffer
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in wages . Moving
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hand in
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of some machinery .
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, Railways, Telegram facilities , Printing press, etc.
Therefore
they snatched the employment opportunities from many
persons
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. For epitome, different riots took place in various parts of
india
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such
as Orissa, Bengal,Assam etc, regarding labour rights and the discrimination they had faced while working with them on
such
low wages . On Contrary to
this
, for
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of a developed nation like India, innovations are
must
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in almost every field.
However
, we can not neglect them because of
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of
economy
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. More and more machines need less labour force which is unfair for poor citizens as our country statistics
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forty
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of the population as jobless because of illiteracy rate. To encapsulate, technology has both pros and cons,
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, cons can easily
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by imitating numerous measures in
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of finding
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alternative
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for poor individuals, who are dislocated.
Instead
of reducing
utilization
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the utilization
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of Innovations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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