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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate four destinations of graduates and postgraduates from the UK after leaving university in 2008.In
this
 case, people who went into full-time
work
 after graduation were excluded. From an
overall
 perspective,the total
number
 of graduated
students
 was almost 10 times higher than that of postgraduates.
Moreover
,
students’
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 desire to go for
further
 education was the highest destination of the other three choices.
On the contrary
, the fewest
number
 of both of the total
students
 kept them as volunteers. In terms of graduate
students
, almost 30000
students
 did
further
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 study which was the highest demand of
four
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the four
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 terms.
In contrast
, only 3500
students
 were interested in volunteering after graduating which is the least
number
overall
. The
number
 of
students
 who were involved in part-time
work
 and became unemployed was averagely the same, 17735 and 16235 people respectively. With regard to postgraduates,the
number
 of
students
 who did
further
 study and part-time
work
 showed similar numbers ( 2725 and 2535 respectively) which were about 9th times greater than that of voluntary
work
.
Moreover
, the
number
 of unemployed postgraduate
students
 was 1625.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, moreover, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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