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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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Some
people
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 try every effort to do education and employment issues in order to win others. There are several reasons why
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, and I believe
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 vital to be hardworking every time. On the one hand, I would argue that
people
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work
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 harder than others due to personal achievements. For students, they will study hard in
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 and overcome
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 a competitive environment with their classmates, so that they might have bigger opportunities to enter a prestigious university.
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, students who get better grades may have more choices for their later careers.
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, they can choose to major in subjects that can earn more money in the future,
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 as doctors or lawyers. As for workers, they may want to
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 hard in the workplace in order to be promoted to a higher position
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 and have a brighter future.
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, I think it is significant for
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 always keep in hard
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.
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, if they don’t consistently motivate themselves to become a better person, they will fall back.
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, working hard gives
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 a chance to get higher salaries, and it is important for maintaining
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’s basic needs in food, resources or bills.
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, for
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 who
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 harder enough, they might have access to higher social status, which would lead to better respect from others. Take professors
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 example, they have a well-known reputation
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 and be respected by the public. In conclusion,
people
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 will
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 in both school and the workplace to win a sense of
honor
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, and I think it is a positive trend for
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, high salaries and better social status.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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