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Nowadays, not many university students choose science subjects in many countries. What are the reasons? What are the effects on the society?

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The two diagrams illustrate how an island had changed after the development of tourism. By comparing the two graphs, it can be seen clearly that there have been 6 significant changes made to
this
 island, and the most noticeable one relates to the construction of the pier. Looking at the maps in detail, there was a cluster of homes on the north-eastern corner of the map in 1968.
However
, the housing area has been about twice as large as it is before. Meanwhile, the shipside on the midstream was demolished and a new main road from east to west has been built, which provides access for inhabitants to go to city zones faster than before. On the west side of the upstream, a tract of the forest was no longer present, and
instead
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 we can see two car parks and three buildings have been constructed. In the future,
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the downstream, a new car park is planned to accommodate the increasing number of the local inhabitants.
Moreover
, a church will appear in the future to the east of the new parking lot.
Finally
, the most noticeable plan is a pedestrian path across the river, which provides an eco-friendly choice to arrive city and a place for exercise.
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