Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

These days, popular
leisure
activities
have been affected by
trends
and
fashion
than individuals’
interests
and
preference
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preferences
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. I believe that
people
still prefer to do their
favorite
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activities
in
free
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their free
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time.
First
, the hobby
preference
is associated with our characteristic traits, age and even mood. when we are
child
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children
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, we are interested in playing with our friends in the summer holidays. Most children do not pay attention to
trends
and
fashion
while, by getting age, our
interests
may change.
In other words
, adults select their
hobbies
based on their personality.
For example
, the majority of
introvert
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people
prefer to have lazy and tranquil
leisure
activities
like spending time on the beach in order to
relaxed
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and read their
favorite
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favourite
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books.
On the other hand
, most extrovert
people
are willing to spend their spare time on exciting
activities
or extreme sports in order to burn energy and become thrilled.
Moreover
, during
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, humans experience different good and bad moods. and their psychological status and mood impact the type of
hobbies
which they select.
For instance
,
in
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rainy and gloomy days, some
people
feel sad and depressed.
Therefore
, they turn to
do
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doing
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some indoor
activities
like watching their
favorite
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movie or cooking.
Therefore
, in my opinion,
people
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leisure
activities
are mostly influenced by mood, age, and personality rather
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than
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that
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than
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fashion
or
trends
.
Nevertheless
, it is undeniable that there are individuals who pay attention to
trends
a
fashion
and they try to follow them in various aspects of their life, especially most
of
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teenagers
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focus on
trends
considerably so that they might select their
leisure
activities
according to
trends
.
For instance
, some trend videos of famous celebrities are popular
among
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their social circles. Some of them follow them in order to be acceptable and stand out among their friends. They ignore their
interests
and
preference
.
For example
, if
adventures
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activities
like kiting become
trend
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a trend
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, it is likely that some teenagers do that in spite of that they have fear of heights.
However
, the number of adults who prefer
to
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popular
hobbies
rather than their
favorite
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favourite
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leisure
activities
.
this
is because
on
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of
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the internet and social media.
For example
, they intend to attract more and more
follower
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followers
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in
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to
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their page or to show off among their friends by
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some pictures and videos of their
hobbies
on
the
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social media like Facebook or Instagram. To sum up, in my point of view, the
trends
have changed the hobby
preference
of
people
, but it is not as influential as their
interests
.
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