Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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has been a global issue nowadays but some

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believe it is

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beneficial

benefitial

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beneficial

for a

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to have large number

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. The opponents

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believe that it will only increase the graduate

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rate of a

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. In my opinion I completely with the

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essay will discuss both sides and

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for my opinion. In the present

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most young children are

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interested

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in higher education as they believe it creates opportunities to land

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their dream

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is not always the case as thousands of students graduate every year and it will be difficult to find a

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suitable for the qualification.

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, most undergraduates work in fast food or

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costumer

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care until they find a

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. Most

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consider

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as the biggest issue as it is impractical to create

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opportunities for all.

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, in Sri Lanka more than thirty per cent of the graduates are unemployed.

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will cause the

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to lose millions as most

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study in public universities which

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full

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maintained by the government.

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, they cannot recover the money

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as the

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who studied there will migrate to another

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, the more

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are

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interested

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in higher education the more intelligent the society will be.An educated society will take better

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decisions

decissions

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decisions

as they have developed their analytical and critical thinking. When

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are educated they get opportunities to move abroad.

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is the main way the

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earn dollars which is important to the economy. To exemplify, the Sri Lankan government entered into

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agreement with

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such

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as Japan and UK

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to send qualified government employees to overcome the

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economic

econmic

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economic

crisis. In conclusion, it is clear that having

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number of university students will increase

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unemployment

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the unemployment

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rate within a

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. But in my point of view, I believe that having

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educated society is vital for a

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to develop.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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