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the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

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The charts illustrate the
precantages
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percentage
percentages
 of the average family expenditure on
food
 from 1980 to 2000. The graph represents the number of
meals
 consumed in fast
food
 and sit-down
restaurants
. Overall, the
pupolarity
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popularity
polarity
 of fast
food
 among people was increasing throughout the years.
Moreover
, the consumption rate of
this
 type of
food
 significantly rose to the highest over the four decades. Focusing on
families
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families'
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budget
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budgets
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, people used to cook their
food
 in their homes, as 90% of
catering
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the catering
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 budget
spent
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was spent
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 on groceries in 1970.
However
,
this
 figure decreased slightly by 5%, while
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fast-food
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fast
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the fast
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food
 budget became 15% in 1980.
Furthermore
, after 10 years, people were spending 35% of their catering finances on
restaurants
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restaurant
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food
. In 2000, people’s
food
 expenses
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split
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were splited
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splited
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split
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 equally between
home cooking
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home-cooking
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 groceries and fast
food
meals
. Turning to restaurant
meals
 numbers, buying
food
 from
restaurants
 was the lowest trend in 1970, where
number
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a number
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 of
meals
 bought in 1970 was 40. These figures witnessed a rise from 29 and 35
meals
anually
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annually
 for fast pick-up
food
 and the
food
 served inside the
restaurants
 respectively. Picking
food
 became
most
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the most
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 common choice in 1990 and 2000,
where
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when
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it
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its
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 figures soared to 51 and 83
meals
 per year, respectively.
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