Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession.What factor may have caused this situation and what in your opinion, should be done it.

University
graduates are dreaming to get an occupation in line with their chosen profession. They hope by enrolling in
university
will help their professional career in the future.
However
, in
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it is hard for them to meet their professional expectations. In
this
essay, I will describe factors that may lead to
this
situation.
Firstly
, it is because of the limited
experiences
that they have.
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explained here not only talk about work but
also
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experiences
such
as organizational, group
activities
, and all works related to campus.
This
might happen because
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university
, scholars tend to have their own choice of education courses.
Then
, sometimes they choose not to be involved in any other projects or organizations because it might be helpful for them to focus on subject matters only. By doing so, they do not realize that all
activities
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their curriculum vitae which is necessary
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time
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ahead. In my opinion, In order to avoid
this
situation, it is very crucial for universities to make mandatory program
activities
not only about working but
also
organizations
such
as
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,
exchange
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students so that undergraduates must participate actively.
Hence
, when they finish
their
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school they definitely have
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their resume.
Secondly
, getting a job for recent graduates is very competitive. It is simply because every year the universities produce workforces and the company available is limited.
Hence
, I think it is better for the
university
to have some entrepreneur programs offered in order to prepare the sophomore to think not only about having employment but
also
to open
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a business
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business
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to the public. Indeed, it will create a job market for everyone and
to
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increase economic
activities
in a country.
Finally
, universities need to offer various programs to boost careers for students. Since the graduates lack experience in the working field, they need to prepare for it.
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