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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples of necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is often argued that a position with huge remuneration is of greater priority than the fulfilment it brings. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think that
job
 satisfaction is much more essential than a big wage.
First
 of all, I believe that being satisfied with one's duty gives a sense of fulfilment regardless of the money being paid. Despite the huge salary, the joy and contentment derived cannot be quantified.
For example
, I once heard a story of a top manager in a multinational company who was
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frustrated
 with his
job
 even though he was highly paid . It is
therefore
 important to take a
job
that is
 appealing rather than the big salary it promises.
Secondly
, being compassionate about your work keeps you motivated and always seeking opportunities for career and personal development.
Furthermore
, work satisfaction results in productivity and contentment that money cannot give .
For instance
, as an eye care professional, the joy of saving the sight of my patients and the huge smile on their faces motivated me to gain more knowledge and skills which resulted in greater productivity far
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beyond what
a high wage can give .
Thus
 advantages of a fulfilled
job
 far
outweighs
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 the big pay. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that a big salary is highly significant than
job
 satisfaction because the contentment of one's position makes people joyful and motivated.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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