Some people make new friends on social sites and Internet chat rooms.Some people think it is a good thing .Some people think it is better to make friends face to face.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Recently, the debate on which channels should be used to make new
friends
has been heated. While some
people
claim that it is better to build up
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friendship
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reality, I agree with those who believe that making
friends
through
internet
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is more convenient.
To begin
with, it seems more possible for
people
to maintain their
friendship
through
face to
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face-to-face
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face
meeting
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. Since there may be
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fack
informations
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in reality than
virtual
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the virtual
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world, citizens may share more about themselves when they are having some
face to
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face-to-face
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face
meeting
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meetings
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.
For instance
,
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difficulties
difficuties
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difficulties
may be
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maybe
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tell
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while
people
are having afternoon tea.
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,
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friendship
can be more sustainable once
people
have a better understanding
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others' backgrounds rather than interests only.
On the other hand
, I would argue that social sites and
internet
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can
explose
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expose
explore
human
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humans
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to
mutipul
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multiple
opportunities when it comes to making new
friends
. As the
morden
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modern
technology breaks the geographic barriers, it seems easier for us to find out those who share the same interest and chat with them.
For example
,
people
can follow and communicate with others on
instragram
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Instagram
if they are interested in the
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blogger
bigger
.
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, the
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modern
technology allows human beings to get in touch with more
people
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their social status or ages. In conclusion, making
friends
in reality
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can better solidify
the
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friendship
while using social sites and
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internet
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insternet
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Internet
may give
people
chances to make
friends
all over the world.
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