The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the figure for employment in the
UK
in 1998 and 2012. It is clear from the information provided that the majority of
people
in the
UK
worked in a full-time
job
in both years, the male was much greater than female. In 1988, men in full-time jobs accounted for 53% with over 12 thousand
people
which was by far the highest of all.
Although
the number of
it
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in 2012
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increased the proportion in the
UK
experienced a decrease to 47%.
By contrast
, females in
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the
a
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full-time
job
has
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significantly risen to just over one quarter from 1998 to 2012, and the
amount
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of workers increased by over three thousand
people
. Turning to the remaining items, the figure for both gender in the part-time
job
was not changed a lot. The percentage of women working in part-time jobs decreased by 2% but the total number climbed to almost 6 thousand
people
. Men in the part-time
job
were the
last
group of all in the
UK
from 1988 to 2012 with 6% and 7% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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