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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right exclude males and females from certain professions because of their genders?

#women #men #strengths #weaknesses #right #males #females #professions #genders
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To begin
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 with, that
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 is really common. Every day I listen that
women
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 have fewer strengths and weaknesses than men. And a lot of males agree with
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 and consider that females can not
work
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 in a factory.
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, in my view,
women
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 have more restrictions in
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 than men due the
gender
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. It's not right. On the one hand,
gender
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 division of
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 should not be. It's
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 need to solve by governments because they can make a law that says that everyone chooses the job that they want. If we select
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 way we will decide on
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 question quickly.
However
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, some males resolve that they can be free from hard
work
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 and trust it for females.
On the other hand
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,
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problem
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 is more difficult than we think. It is necessary to equalize
gender
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 inequality. In some situations have to promote equality of opportunity for men and
women
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 in the workplace.
For instance
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, my father worked in a factory and told me a situation when one female started to
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 too in
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 place. A lot of males said it wasn't a
women
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's job and she shouldn't
work
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 here. When the director began to support
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 system of promotion everything came to be understood.
Moreover
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, when in the workplace will be working
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 more
women
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 will stop fearing.They are going to be a team man who will not say a word.The
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 about due
gender
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 will disappear and all people never said that
women
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 weakness. To sum up, it is
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 actually important and difficult.We need to disrupt the framework of our society and don't stop doing action even if the
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 is not solved quickly.
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