Alternative energy source that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

It is frequently believed that
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the
production
of green
energy
such
as
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solar power wind power and wave power is unaffordable and complex. While the traditional
energy
sources like oil, gas and coal
is
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cheaper for city and
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transportation
transportaion
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transportation
purpose. I disagree with
this
belief. In
this
essay, I will explain
the
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green
energy
is more productive and harmless
for
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earth
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. Climate change is a huge problem, which is not limited
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a group of
region
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regions
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or countries. It affects each and every part of the globe.
Reasercher
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Researchers
Researcher
had proved that excessive usage of natural
energy
sources namely oil, gas,
coal
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results in global warming.
This
picture can
be
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change
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by replacing them with green
energy
. The
production
cost of alternative
energy
is an issue. To protect mother nature is more important than the economics of the country. As the technology is getting advanced every day the expenses of alternate
energy
can be reduced.
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, 20 years ago
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a phone or television set was not
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budget-friendly
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budget friendly
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for
every one
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, but now it is common to have
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smart phone
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and
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flat
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screen television in each home. Rather than funding the unnecessary space program, if
government
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will spend money on safer
energy
production
, it will help the reduction of pollution.
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Instead
Instaed
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Instead
of saving money we all should concentrate on saving natural wealth
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so that our
next
generations can experience the real beauty of nature. In conclusion, by developing
a better equipment
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better equipment
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for green
energy
production
we can
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replace
place
rplace
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place
the traditional
energy
sources for
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vehicles
vehicals
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vehicles
and cities
in
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better
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a better
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cost.
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