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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of the cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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It is now a common phenomenon all over the world that the national authorities are monitoring
companies
to relocate
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 to rural
areas
. I believe that the merits of having
such
 a trend far supersede the negative outcomes. To start with, the establishment of
companies
 creates jobs which
reduces
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 the number of criminal activities because the least paid or general workers are usually from the nearest suburb.
Furthermore
, land prices are cheaper and more available in rural
areas
. Workers in regional
areas
 can be hired for a lower salary which is an advantage to the company, profits increase and the company will be able to open more branches.
Moreover
 more jobs are created. In
addtion
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addition
 to that, improved education is ensured some general workers will
further
 their education levels to acquire high posts and better salaries Raw materials are located in rural
areas
 so it makes sense for many
companies
 to be situated nearer to their required resources which
makes
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 for lower transport cost among other benefits.
On the other
hand
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 there are a few disadvantages in moving the business to the rural
areas
such
 as connection may not be reliable and
this
 can adversely affect
companies
 as
this
 can disrupt production through
lot
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 of working
ours
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. While the labour force is easily available but their skills levels do leave a lot
be
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 desired. As the company may have to spend more money
through
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 training expenses in order in order to upgrade
their
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its
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 expertise. In conclusion, it is quite evident that a development
such
 as the above would benefit a greater segment of the community thereby raising the general standards of living for society across the border.
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