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In some cities, the government has tried to reduce traffic by adopting measures such as congestion tax during rush hours. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion tax
  • traffic flow
  • emissions
  • public transport
  • economic impact
  • lower-income
  • urban liveability
  • infrastructure
  • viable alternatives
  • wear and tear
  • emissions reduction
  • peak hours
  • rush hour
  • traffic density
  • commuters
  • transport policy
  • mobility
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