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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
 letter referring to the advertisement I saw in a weekend magazine which was regarding a child caretaker.
This
 opportunity will be ideal for me due to various reasons. The
first
 reason is that I love to spend my time with kids since it provides me pleasure.
In addition
 to that,
currently
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 I am studying in
my
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 final semester of
the
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 degree and I wanted to do a job which does not affect
for
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my studies as well as to have a considerable financial benefit. I will be a good match
to
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 your requirement because I am following a child care degree program which provided me practical exposure
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 handling a
three year old
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 child 6 months ago.
Moreover
, I will be able to help your kid with school work since I am
also
 learning these days. I prefer to spend my free time
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exploring the city.
However
, in
coming
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 six months, most probably I will stay at home because I have my final semester exams. I am expecting
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a favourable reply from you. Yours Faithfully, Thuya Perera
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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