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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.
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The bar charts illustrate information about four various destinations of
graduate
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 and
post
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postgraduate
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graduate
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students
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 of the UK after completing their college in the year 2008 .those who started full-time education.
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 it is clearly evident both UK
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 had a similar destination after leaving college as the figures show the majority went for
further
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 study and the least
number
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 of them chorused for voluntary works. It is obvious that about 17.735
graduate
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students
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 opted for part-time work which is only 1500 people more than the
number
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 of unemployed graduates about a
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 of unemployment graduates about 16.235
students
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 .
likewise
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 the
number
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 of postgraduates who went on to part-time work and
further
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 study are close to each other with a difference of 190 people on the figures.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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