You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you in response to the acceptance letter which I received for the job post of assistant manager. I am very much interested in accepting the offer,

however

, I am finding it difficult to start by next week since I am already in Denmark for my graduation. As I managed to finish my

masters

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in business management with honours at Clorevo University, they requested me to visit Denmark for graduation. I left Sri Lanka

last

Monday,

however

, I am planning to return to Sri Lanka on 14th May 2022 which falls on the third week of

this

month. Could it be possible to shift the starting date to the third week? It was my childhood dream to join your company and I am happy to accept the job offer. Hope you

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consider my request. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Migara Wickramasinghe

Submitted by migara.dak on Mon Jul 18 2022

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Develop the response to fully address all aspects of the prompt, including a clear explanation of the previous commitment and a polite request to delay the start date.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that the ideas are logically organized and connected, leading to a clear and cohesive argument. Consider using appropriate transition words to enhance cohesion and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

157 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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