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Science gives people life expectancy of close to 100 years or even more. Some people view it in a positive light, but others believe it creates some problems. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#science #people #life #expectancy #years #light
Dear Nisha,
First
 of All, Congratulations on your placement at The University.Hope you are doing good and let me help you to choose
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accommodation
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accommadation
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accommodation
. Actually,I stayed around 4 years in the hostel at kodambakkam which was located nearby our campus.It took just 5 minutes to reach the college from my hostel.I felt very comfortable staying and I had a few friends
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They
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 took care of me very well on my tough days. Nowadays,you can easily find
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a hostel
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 via the internet because there are lots of options to find
good
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 place.I will suggest you one freeware which is called Rentocare through
this
 program you will get the
best paying
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 guest rooms throughout the city,
moreover
this
 is
free
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 operating system which is very convenient. particularly, Many homes provide homemade food, and
also
 they have laundry service. So you can concentrate on your studies without any other burdens.
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 of all other things,You should take a single bedded room so that you can get privacy
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 because each one has
different
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 sleeping time. If you choose
single
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a single
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bedroom
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bed room
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,
then
 only you will make your stay better.Make sure the place is nearby college and find good shops within walkable distance to save travel time. let me know when you find the place to stay and take care dear. Yours lovingly Tamil
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