In many part of the world, women study science and technology but do not work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology?

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Sincerely, Rose Ng

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In many part of the world, women study science and technology but do not work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology?

Fully explain your ideas

Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should receive formal training at school on how to be good parents in the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement??

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.