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In many part of the world, women study science and technology but do not work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology?

#part #world #women #study #science #technology #work #fields #measures
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Mr.
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 Yu, Hello, sorry for
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inconvenience
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you
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.
I’m
 a Business Management Diploma Course student. (BM-105) My name is Rose Ng. Student Number : 190875.
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 you I will quit the course
on
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next
 month.
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 I have a full-time job at the moment, recently I got a promoted to be a Sales Manager by my boss, and we
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. Owing to my suddenly raise
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 I couldn’t
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afford
a
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plenty of time to study while onwards to the career. On
the
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temporary, I will stop my learning for a while. May I ask whether credits can be
extent
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 for my diploma? I absolutely understand I will lose my GPA marks, but
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 to continue my study plan
on
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 the future when
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busy. I would like to
organizes
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for
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the
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 Business Management knowledge, that’s could helpful for my job.
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, I can study again in
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 seminar, in
April
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 autumn
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, I can do the lesson payment
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 now,
therefore
 I can hold on
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 student seat. And thank you for your help.
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 your assistance
,
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 and
waiting
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the
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respond
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 from you.
Your
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 Sincerely, Rose Ng
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