Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such measures cause? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Even before the introduction of technology ,
agriculture
has been there. Our parents were farmers. They cultivate and harvest their plant products which they survive on. A few numbers of person thinks that land for
food
production is becoming scarce and the world's
meat
consumption
should be minimized while other thinks the opposite .
This
essay will be discussing on the possible outcome if
such
measures are taken. Before the era of ,technology our elders feeds on farm products and still lived a
longer
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and healthy life.
Agriculture
increases the economy of the country day by day . Without enough
farmland
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there will be
food
scarcity thereby leading to hunger and unemployment . Most people go with the idea that protein can only be derived from
meat
only and finds it difficult to let go.
Consumption
of
meat
is irrelevant
,
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and should be minimized with the following measures,
firstly
government
should create awareness of the importance of
agriculture
and how plant products contain their' own nutritive values, and people should be made to understand that excess
consumption
of
meat
is not healthy,
this
can predispose one into having some health issues
such
as high cholesterol, heart problems and liver problems .
Government
should institute the importance of teaching children agricultural values while in school,
this
invariably means that
agriculture
should be part of the school curriculum . ,
Secondly
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government
should secure lands that will be allocated to individuals only for the purpose of farming . Incentives can be given to the world's best farmers
this
helps to encourage others to work diligently and know there is a reward for hard work. ,
Also
every individual should be enlightened about the six classes of
food
which can be produced from
agriculture
. A fish pond should be an alternative to
meat
as it has limited
consumption
in land space, and it has a lesser negative effect on health.
The most
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scientists
also
finds
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fish more essential than
meat
. Health care providers should educate their clients on the possible side effect of
meat
consumption
.
On the other hand
,
this
might affect the cattle bearers' business as much land space will be limited ,and profits will be
at
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less.
Also
, children may not find
this
interesting . For ,example a child who only eats when he sees
meat
in the
food
will find it difficult to adjust to the present situation, thereby making the child
to
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have
loss
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of appetite and weight loss
this
intense affects his coordination generally. In ,conclusion
government
and individuals should embrace the benefits of
agriculture
more than
meat
consumption
.
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