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Completing University education is thought by some to be the best way to get the job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is important Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Nowadays, achieving a higher degree of education is generally accepted by many that
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 by far the key to success in acquiring a good job in
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 firm or the best position in their career path.
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, there are some who consider that real-life experiences and soft
skills
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 are more essential. From my point of view, both are equally vital, but in some different ways, and the details will be discussed below. Even though pursuing studies in a
university
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need
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 so much time and effort, it is
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 fact that a degree certification still
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 required for people who want to
work
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 in academic fields
such
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 as
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a doctor
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doctor
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, lawyer and architecture. Ones cannot be a doctor treating patients without
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 knowledge and there is no one who can
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 a
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 structure in the absence of
physic
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 expertise. Without a
university
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 graduate, it is almost impossible to apply for
job
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 in
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 areas mentioned.
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, it can be shown as
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physical evidence
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 to guarantee
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your competency. Studying in the
university
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 for four years, or five to six years in some faculties
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 gives you many theoretical
knowledges
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pieces of knowledge
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 that can be applied
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and
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expanded to use in many different situations.
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, some people believe that
work
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 familiarity and soft
skills
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,
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 as time management
skills
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 and interpersonal
skills
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, could gain only from
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real-life experience and sometimes they are the factors which put some candidates a step ahead of others in
an
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employment, particularly in business or marketing field. In my opinion, as the time passes in your
work
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 life, the more practical
skills
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 you will have. People with
experiences
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experience
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 can be more adaptive
for
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 any volatile situations and
who
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those who
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developing
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 soft
skills
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 can
work
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 harmoniously with colleagues, which certainly
produce
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produces
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 a higher quality
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work
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of work
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 performance. In conclusion, theoretical
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 from
university
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 and experiences gained from
work
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 are equally important. Both can give you essential
skills
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 that make you
work
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 more effectively in
a
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real-life practice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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