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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams give information on the data of 5 main resources stored in 2015 and others show the prediction about how these energies will be changed.
Overall
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, most
energy
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 capacity will decline in the future, except for solar and wind
power
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. It is clear to see that the total
energy
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 capacity will increase from 6,688 GW to 11,678 GW. Fossil fuels are an important
power
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 in both years.
This
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power
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 accounted for over half of the pie chart in 2015, but it will just decrease slightly by 44% in 2040.
Similarly
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, Nuclear and other renewable
energy
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 will drop
only
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 1% and 2%,respectively.
In contrast
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, wind and solar
power
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 will only grow two energies, especially solar
energy
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, the
energy
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 of solar will rise quickly from 2% in 2015 to 18% in 2040.
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, wind
power
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 will rise from 5 % in 2015 to 12% in the future.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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