The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
We have two images that present us with how
cement
and concrete are produced. We can observe that for concrete
production
we need to have
cement
in the first place because
cement
is a needed ingredient in order to obtain concrete. We can
also
see that to produce
cement
we need an entire
production
line, and it needs to be produced in a factory because there are special conditions and special equipment needed to obtain it. Meanwhile, for concrete
production
it is not mandatory to produce it in a factory, one can make concrete
also
at home, only by mixing
cement
, sand, water, and gravel together, without needing a piece of special equipment.
Also
, we can conclude that the energy used to produce
cement
is greater compared to the energy used in the case of concrete
production
.
That is
because for
cement
production
we need the crusher, the mixer, the rotating heater, heat, and the grinder. When
for
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producing concrete, you can only mix the ingredients with a shovel or with a concrete mixer and you need energy only for the latter. In conclusion, we cannot obtain concrete without having
cement
and we can obtain concrete only by mixing a few ingredients:
cement
, water, sand, and gravel.
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