Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
youngters
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youngsters
are choosing
sports persons
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as their idols, so the majority of the people
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that they have greater
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responsibility
resposibility
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responsibility
in carrying good mentorship all the time for young
children
.
However
, I completely agree with
this
statement as it helps in building
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childs'
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future in a positive way.
Firstly
,
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athletes
atheletes
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athletes
with a positive image can inspire many
children
in developing a career. As the majority of
children
follow their hero's
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various social
medias
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media
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and not only that they, always try to mock their
idol's
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. In
this
way
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they can build their career in the
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footsteps
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foot steps
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footsteps
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of their role models.
For example
, we all are aware that the
currect
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current
correct
sports
person's
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people
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like Virat Kohli, Rohit Sharma, Yuvraj
singh
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, etc are
big
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a big
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fan
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fans
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of Sachin Tendulkar, inspired by him they became professional
crickters
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cricketers
and living a luxurious life.
Furthermore
,
sports
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a sports
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person can help
children
not only professionally but
also
personally.
In other
words
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guiding
children
to do good things and
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them
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benefits
benefit
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the benifts
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benifts
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benefits
that
comes
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come
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from doing good.
For
instance
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they can ask their young fans to plant trees and explain the benefits that
comes
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from plating trees like fresh oxygen, fruits coming from the tree etc. In
this
way
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they can help the teens to become responsible citizens. In conclusion, role models play a
crusial
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crucial
role in youngsters life both professionally and personally so it their responsibility to maintain
good
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reputation all the time.
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