Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

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youngters

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are choosing

sports persons

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as their idols, so the majority of the people

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believe

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belive

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believe

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that they have greater

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responsibility

resposibility

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responsibility

in carrying good mentorship all the time for young

children

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, I completely agree with

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statement as it helps in building

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childs'

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future in a positive way.

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athletes

atheletes

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athletes

with a positive image can inspire many

children

in developing a career. As the majority of

children

follow their hero's

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various social

medias

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and not only that they, always try to mock their

idol's

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. In

this

way

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they can build their career in the

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foot steps

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of their role models.

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, we all are aware that the

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current

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sports

person's

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people

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like Virat Kohli, Rohit Sharma, Yuvraj

singh

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, etc are

big

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fan

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fans

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of Sachin Tendulkar, inspired by him they became professional

crickters

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cricketers

and living a luxurious life.

Furthermore

sports

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a sports

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person can help

children

not only professionally but

also

personally.

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words

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guiding

children

to do good things and

teach

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them

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benefits

benefit

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the benifts

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benifts

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benefits

that

comes

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from doing good.

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instance

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they can ask their young fans to plant trees and explain the benefits that

comes

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from plating trees like fresh oxygen, fruits coming from the tree etc. In

this

way

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they can help the teens to become responsible citizens. In conclusion, role models play a

crusial

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crucial

role in youngsters life both professionally and personally so it their responsibility to maintain

good

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reputation all the time.

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Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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