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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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These days, it is common to see workers changing their
jobs
 pretty often,
instead
 of staying just in one company the whole time. I believe that nowadays there are more
job
opportunities
 than in the past, so
people
 prefer to try different
companies
.
However
, I
also
 think that under good working conditions
companies
 could keep their employees for longer. Traditionally finding a
job
 was quite hard,
people
 had to go around different offices or shops asking for work,
also
 they had to buy the newspaper to find out if there were new
job
 offers. For that reason,
people
 used to
kept
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 their
jobs
during
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throughout
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 their entire careers. Currently, with the advancement in technology and the development in telecommunication, it is easier to find
jobs
 and have interviews online.
Furthermore
, having easy access to
jobs
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 information
such
 as salaries, positions, company expectations and employee references, offer
people
 the chance to change their
workplace
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On the other hand
, there are
companies
 that look forward to
keep
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 their employees for long periods of time, but how could they do that? I strongly believe that employees need motivation and incentives,
such
 as
opportunities
 to grow in their positions, salary increases, paid holidays, fair parental leave and work flexibility. Given that, workers would have a positive response and they will work harder to keep climbing in the same company. In conclusion, it is known that the variety of
job
opportunities
 and the easy access to them is making
people
 wonder
around
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 different
jobs
.
However
, it is time for
companies
 to start creating
job
opportunities
 where
people
 can actually grow and where they can feel that they are valued.
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