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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the babysitting job for your child which was advertised in the magazine, The Family Man. My name is Fiona Lewis, and I live in Delhi. While I was glancing through the magazine, I came across
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 opportunity which made me so happy as I am someone who is fond of kids. I love spending my time with them and engaging them in different play activities.
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, I am willing to relocate temporarily to Australia to have
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international exposure. By profession, I am a babysitter, and I
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 have an experience of 5 years in a play school. I am trained and certified to provide
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 care to infants and kids
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 age of 10 years.
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 I have never been to any foreign country, I can easily adapt to
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 environment, and my
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proficency
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 is very good.
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, I do not have any personal responsibilities as I am unmarried. If I get
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 opportunity, I would
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 like to explore
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 new country. As Australia is known for its beaches, I would like to spend my free time there and learn various water sports.
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, I would definitely like to try the local cuisine there. I hope you would like my profile for taking care of your kid, and I am hoping
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positive response from your side. Yours faithfully, Fiona Lewis

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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