You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the babysitting job for your child which was advertised in the magazine, The Family Man. My name is Fiona Lewis, and I live in Delhi. While I was glancing through the magazine, I came across

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opportunity which made me so happy as I am someone who is fond of kids. I love spending my time with them and engaging them in different play activities.

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, I am willing to relocate temporarily to Australia to have

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international exposure. By profession, I am a babysitter, and I

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have an experience of 5 years in a play school. I am trained and certified to provide

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care to infants and kids

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upto

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age of 10 years.

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I have never been to any foreign country, I can easily adapt to

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environment, and my

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proficency

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is very good.

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, I do not have any personal responsibilities as I am unmarried. If I get

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opportunity, I would

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like to explore

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new country. As Australia is known for its beaches, I would like to spend my free time there and learn various water sports.

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, I would definitely like to try the local cuisine there. I hope you would like my profile for taking care of your kid, and I am hoping

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positive response from your side. Yours faithfully, Fiona Lewis

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

240 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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The Greeting

The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other sunbjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as poor people become poorer and rich people become richer. What problems could this situations cause? what are the solutions to address those problems?