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duration of telephone calls in Finland, in minutes, divided into three different categories, from 1995 to 2004.

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A glance at the bar chart provided depicts the duration of telephone calls in
Finland
, in
minutes
, divided into three different categories, from 1995 to 2004. It can be clearly seen that local-landline was always the highest
Finland's
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 telephone calls. While, there was an increase
for
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in
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 national and international -
landline
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landlines
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 and mobiles over the periods. Looking in more detail, in 1995,
local
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 - landline category started with 12,000
million
minutes
 and continuously grew until 2001. Following that, it decreased to approximately 16,200
million
minutes
 in 2002.
Although
 it experienced a downward trend at the end of the period, it still had the highest number of telephone calls in
Finland
 which stood at 12,000
million
minutes
. It is interesting to note that national and international -
landline
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 always stood at the
second
 position during the periods. It started at 6,000
minutes
 (millions) in 1995 and finished at just over 10,000
million
minutes
. While
,
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 mobiles category was always the uncommon calls in
Finland
, began at about 200
minutes
 (millions) in 1995, and ended with just under 10,000
million
minutes
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call
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.
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